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The Gypsy Wandered In by ~batousaijin:iconbatousaijin:





The Gypsy Wandered In

Guileless innocent, you do not do.
Brown gypsy, you are more than what you appear.
A grievous end is what you pursue.

Compound eyes work against you
when a fatal lamp wick lures you near.
Too early seen unknown, you do not do.

The looming porch light, color blue,
is Lepidopterans' despair.
Quit the fruitless path you pursue.

Cedar branches sway a song that soothes
but drives you mad—flaming wings of cashmere,
singed antennae, you do not do.

Earthen moth, the route you flew
blazes wingdust in a flash of tears.
You only attain what you pursue.

You steal a drink from a drop of dew.
You whisper songs of light in my ear
and vanish in the afterglow. You do not do
the grievous end you once pursued.
©2008-2009 ~batousaijin
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Author's Comments

I know, i know. I should have learned enough about villanelles by now to know that i'm not good at them. But, strike when the muse is hot, I always say. Was thinking about moths as a subject with poetic potential, read a great poem, "Moth to His Flame," by `jade-pandora, then decided to write the poem i'd been thinking about in villanelle form for *Flutterings's Villanelle Contest.

Preview, "Moth," by ~raeven667.

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:iconjade-pandora:
ohhh gosh, did I inspire you to write this? :faint: It's quite lovely you see, and my wishes to you in the success of your contest entry! :heart:

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:iconbatousaijin:
yes and no, i was actually thinking about writing a moth poem, then i read your fabulous one, then i decided to make it a villanelle--in that order. thanks :)

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"The rose is a great deal more than a blushing apology for the thorn." --Rabindranath Tagore
:iconbellaezrebetfang:
I hope you do wel because this is a good poem. :)
The flow and rhyming scheme are really well put together.
Not too choppy or too flowy.
Nice job.

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"God, we're off the rails,
now they drag me off in pieces." - elle-sophicles
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"I will make pilgrims of my fingers,"
- ScarlettLetters :iconscarlettletters:
:iconbatousaijin:
thanks :)

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"The rose is a great deal more than a blushing apology for the thorn." --Rabindranath Tagore
:iconbellaezrebetfang:
You're welcome!

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"God, we're off the rails,
now they drag me off in pieces." - elle-sophicles
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"I will make pilgrims of my fingers,"
- ScarlettLetters :iconscarlettletters:
:iconflutterings:
Thank you for entering, good luck!

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:iconbatousaijin:
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"The rose is a great deal more than a blushing apology for the thorn." --Rabindranath Tagore

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