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An isolated, winding gimbal floats along
The medium between my lips and your ears—
A tidy pouch
That clutches every thingness in a beaker
And distills it to comprehension—bare minimum,
Square root of Singularity,
Strong like a newborn’s headbutt,
As typical as José or Steve, Haruko or Kristin(a).

Ripe, merciless overcoats of crushed purple velvet
Find their way to me
In a bargain-priced thrift store.
They carry faces, names.
Intricate carvings—stones, shells—set in relief on
Technology as old as pants—buttons, Cameos.
Style à la mode.
Cameo is a nice name for a girl.

Annelise Tomoē is what I'll name my daughter,
If I have one.
She already will be and will have been mostly American—
The “new” American—Part French Canadian, Part Mexican,
Part Amer-Indian, Cajun, Japaneezian Asian,
Caucasian (slash) Aryan.
Almost any ’un can make a contribution,
And has, or is about to.
©2006-2009 ~batousaijin
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This is a poem that I hope will be published by my college's creative writing student journal, Inscape. Tell me what you think, whether it makes sense or not, if it touches you, if you think it's just a bunch of random words collected together (because it isn't).

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:iconaurora-sakura:
i liked it! Very well written and insightful I LOVE the ending. I've never read anything like that before, so it was new to me and different. I ADORE the first stanza, the flow to it is wonderful, and I'm not just saying that because it has my name in it :P

Truly awesome job! :)

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:iconmarchingstitch:
Amazing, like everything you do! I love the picture!!! He's so cute!!! On and the Kristin(a) part made me smile cause Kristina is my name!!! Keep it up Home fry!

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:iconbatousaijin:
thanks. i was kinda borrowing that from teen girl squad when he makes cheerleader say "I miss Kristin... a," like he forgot her name.

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:iconbatousaijin:
thanks so much. is your name Haruko? Kristin(a)? thanks a lot, seriously. I was just trying to express what names do in a poetic fashion, which means saying things in as roundabout a way as possible.

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:iconbatousaijin:
jk, that's not what poetry is really like to me. i thought i should clarify that.

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:iconaurora-sakura:
yeah, Kristin is me name :P
No, i really found it beautiful ^^

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:iconbatousaijin:
thx uber much. maybe writing poetry can be a job i do on the side! (yeah right) :)

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:iconmarchingstitch:
hehehe, yes that always makes me laugh too. The first time i saw that i turned to my friend and was like, whoa! I just died! too funny man too funny!

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:iconchararwen:
no it sounds like you put a lot of thought in to it. I hope it gets published because it is a really good poem! :D

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- proverb
:iconbatousaijin:
thanks a lot. i will keep trying to get it published.

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